Need Feedback - Grab it Loose It

(Grab it Loose It)


Grab Money Grab Fame Grab World Treasure Grab Lame
Grab Everythang Lies At Ur Knees Grimmy Stay
Dirty Money Villa at Beach Carbon Impala Lowrider
Wanna Lowride huh Show Me how to Do It
Fo Pay Back Let Me Show How Dont Loose It
Loose Family Loose Friends Loose Brothers Loose em
Stay Active Member In Close Circle of Friends
Keep Family Close and Fiends at the End
Somebody Got Ma Back I dont End Like 50Cent
Cuz Homeboys aint For Rent nor BodyGuard fo President
Am Leadin my Pavement Way Where To Go
North Sout East West HeartBeat Show There To Go
I loose Fear but Grab Judo When White Boys Judge Me So
No More Drama Life Aint Joke Am Game Conductor And You In Show
I Got There He Knows Let Play Referee /I loose Player card Recently


Drama,Lama,Fame,Shame
Game,Life,Day

Sell Out Crib/ Drugs /Family Stuffs/ Sell Everything
Sell Your Life on SlaveMarket Rest Life End on Streets
That Depend On Me Take SelfConfidence Shield
To Make Big Between Succes Unsucces MineField
Rowling Give me Harry Potter He Gave me My Spell
How To Keep Everything Close Even Gate To Hell
I Feel Empty like Magazine of New Heat
When Close Friends Left Me fo DOpe Shit
OR Bitch Leave Me Fo Richie Snitch
I give YOu my LIfe even Two Mil Crib
Here Take Pill To Sleep Cuz AM enternal
I grab I loose I grab Again /Ready To holD Self-Esteem
14 Rules of Life Budha give to Maintain
Loyality Respect Keep to End of Day
Those Mutafakas Wanna End My Life Today
I can Be Dead But Speech 4Eva Stay


My speech Dedicate To Fellaz Haters Niggaz
HomeBoys From Street Wearin Nikes Phat Pharm
Or Crazy Speech Everyone Who CAres Bout Me and My Family
Everyone I havent Lost Thanks For Faith In Me
For Sight Of Good Sight of Beauty I love Bentley
Nigga Dont Give A Fuck to Motherfuckers Dont Give a Fuck Fo YA
Grab and Dont Loose'

SHYT IS DECENT...

first of....this is pretty decent....real talk


secondly.....this needs to be in open mic.......i'mma help u out wit that


now.....


i like your flow on this.....sometimes it seems like u got too many words in your bars


tha concept of this is cool tho....like i told u earlier, Vic u got potential ...imo


if u continue to hone your skills...u'll be nice



always remember when writin your bars


make sure u can ACTUALLY spit it.....over a beat or acapella

sometimes ppl write in keystyle and cant spit it


write from ur heart and write what u know........


you'll be aaight, trust

even with the language barrier you manage to put out some good shit.. keep it up man. we will only try to help you get better.

one thing that always helps is listenin to a lot of hip hop from the 90s so you can check some dope flows.

yeah thanks ppl ur treasure for me lol

yeah aight thanks jai

theres some good gems in here, but at the same time (could be the translation issue) i dont get some lines.

"Grab Everythang Lies At Ur Knees Grimmy Stay "

"HomeBoys From Street Wearin Nikes Phat Pharm
Or Crazy Speech Everyone Who CAres Bout Me and My Family"

just cant grasp the entire message of the track

"HomeBoys From Street Wearin Nikes Phat Pharm - cuz my homeboys re wearin nikes n phat pharms clothes( most of them) like new style here
Or Crazy Speech Everyone Who CAres Bout Me and My Family- dedicated to ppl who cares fo me

i know where you were going with it...but in context with the lyrics around it ...it just didnt seem to fit...just my opinion tho, like i said its very hard for me to critique keystyle

yeah yeah fine

cant take the feedback, then don't ask me to review it...

what? no thats fine I didnt mean that, I take every critism n feed..I kno that"yeah yeah.." sounds Ironic but it isnt